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Year 5's Blog...

Wednesday's English

25/3/2020

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​Hello Year 5 children,
Today, we want you to revise ‘cohesive devices’ that we use in our writing.  The term   'cohesive devices' refers to the conjunctions, adverbs and pronouns used to link parts of a piece of writing. Using the same verb tense throughout a text also offers 'cohesion'. Cohesive devices improve your writing and help it flow. 
This piece of writing shows how cohesive devices can be used:
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​The time conjunctions in red (first, then, later, after, finally) are used to show that this is a process that has several steps and an end goal. These words are also adverbs, because they tell us when something is done.
 
Pronouns in blue (these to refer to the organs and it to refer to the body) are used to show that the writer is referring back to a person or object already named.
 
Conjunctions in green (and, so, because) are used within sentences to link ideas within a sentence.
 
Check out the Oxford Owl video on this link, which further explains cohesive devices:
https://www.theschoolrun.com/what-are-cohesion-and-cohesive-devices-in-writing
 
For your english work this morning, I would like you to identify any cohesive devices you used in your persuasive advert you wrote a couple of days ago.  Please have a look at the attached text to show how I have highlighted cohesive devices in my persuasive advert to sell a Bugatti.  Don’t worry if you don’t have any colours to highlight the cohesive devices.  Use a pencil instead.  If you haven’t identified any cohesive devices in your writing, then please identify any that you need to include to make your writing flow better.
 
Thank you.
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8 Comments
Michelle
25/3/2020 10:00:15 am

Hello Mr Tait does it have to be about a person in Egypt or do we choose?

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Mr Tait
25/3/2020 10:04:47 am

Hi Michelle,

No, this work follows from work you should have done a couple of days ago. You need to write a persuasive advert first, edit it and then find the cohesive devices.

Mr Tait

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Mr Tait
25/3/2020 01:26:02 pm

Hi Mr Tait should we under line the text with the colours or write with the colours?

Bushra

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Michelle
25/3/2020 10:13:00 am

Hi sir yes I did write my persuasive advert so now I have to edit and then find cohesive devices. Thanks for the help.
Michellexxx

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Mr Tait
25/3/2020 03:33:52 pm

Hi Bushra,

It is great to hear that you are learning. Underlining your text with colours is fine Bushra. Make sure all the words you underline are cohesive devices.

Thanks

Mr Tait

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Hardeep
25/3/2020 06:42:53 pm

I am enjoying working at home.

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Marzia
26/3/2020 04:14:57 pm

Hi mr Ahmed Swift , I am ok

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Faeqa
26/3/2020 05:19:42 pm

Hi Mr Ahmed Swift , i am okay !

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